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One thing I believe I've done a fairly good job of on the site is reinforce the value of structure. You guys understand the inciting incident. You understand where the first act turn needs to be. You understand goals, stakes, and urgency. Some of the more advanced writers understand obstacles and conflict. All of these things are going to give you, at the very least, a solid screenplay.
But lately, I've been running into a lot of screenplays that do all of these things, yet are still boring.
You’d think that if somebody executed my precious GSU, I’d be preparing a 5 course meal of praise for them. But as wonderful as my darling little GSU is, it can’t make up for a crater-sized emotional void in a screenplay. And there are more craters in these scripts than there are on a full moon. They leave me feeling…empty. They don’t connect in some way.
A while back I wrote an article about the 13 things that every screenplay should have. At the end of that article, I talked about something called the “X-Factor.” The X factor is that indefinable thing that elevates a script above the pile. It’s that special sauce that makes all the pieces melt together. I call it the X-Factor because it’s hard to quantify. Something feels exciting and fresh and charged about the screenplay, but you can’t put your finger on what it is.
I believe I've finally figured out what it is.
SOUL.
These well-executed but boring screenplays don't have any soul. All of the elements are where they're supposed to be. But it’s the difference between a human being and a robot. You can feel a human being’s presence, the life beating out of them. The robot may look human, may even act human, but he emits no emotion, no love, no SOUL. So as neat as a human-looking robot is, you’ll never be able to connect with him.
So I set about trying to figure out the impossible: How to quantify SOUL. I realized I couldn’t do it in real life. But maybe I could figure it out in the screenplay world. After looking back through some of my favorite movies, I was able to identify a few things. These probably aren’t the only things that add soul to your script. But they’re the big ones. Naturally, most of them revolve around character.
RELATABLE CHARACTERS – Try to make your characters relatable in some way. There has to be something in them that’s identifiable so an audience can say, “Hey, that’s just like me,” Or “Hey, I have a friend going through the exact same thing!” This familiarity creates a connection between you and your audience that you can then use to extract emotion out of them. Because they now have a personal investment in your character, they’re more likely to care about what happens to them. It might be that your character loses someone close to them (Spider-Man), which is something a lot of people can relate to: loss. Or it might be that your character’s underestimated (Avatar), which is something a lot of us have felt in our lives. But make no mistake, if we don’t relate to the character in SOME WAY, chances are we won’t feel the power of your story.
CHARACTER HISTORY – Every day I believe more and more in character history (or character “biography”) and let me tell you why. The most boring characters I read are the most general ones. The characters I’m attracted to, the ones I want to know the most about, are unique in some way. And you can’t find the uniqueness in a person unless you know their history. Oh sure, you can give your character a quirky little habit to set them apart, like being a master harmonica player or something, but if you don’t know how or why he’s a harmonica master, it’ll just feel like a gimmick. The more work you do – the more you find out about who your character is - the more specific you can make them. If you know your character’s sister died in a car accident, for example, you can make them a cautious driver. If you know your character used to be fat, you can give him low self-esteem. If you know your character used to be a football star, he’ll probably always be bragging about the glory days. The more you know about your character, the more specific you can be. So take the time to write out those big character biographies and GET TO KNOW YOUR CHARACTERS.
CHARACTER FLAW - Creating a character flaw is a key part of giving your screenplay soul because it represents the thing about your character that most needs to change. We all have that, that monkey on our backs that won’t go away, that won’t allow us to reach our full potential. For some of us it's that we're not aggressive enough. For others it's that we let ourselves be taken advantage of. For others still it's that we don't allow people to get close to us. By giving your character something to struggle with, you invite the audience to participate in whether they’ll overcome that struggle or not. And since we all have flaws ourselves, it’s something we want to see rectified. We believe that if our hero changes, WE CAN CHANGE TOO! It inspires us. It gives us hope. And for that reason, we *feel* something.
RELATIONSHIPS - In addition to addressing your characters individually, you want to address who they are with others. Remember that our entire lives are dictated by our relationships. The people we connect with on a daily basis are our world. So you want to spend a big chunk of your screenplay exploring those relationships. Start by finding relatable issues your characters are going through. Maybe a marriage is in trouble because the husband is a workaholic. Maybe two soul mates meet but it turns out one of them is engaged. You then want to explore the conflict and the issues in those relationships in a way that’s unique to your story. And really *think* about what your characters are going through. Treat them like real people with real problems. Lester Burnham in American Beauty had to come to terms with his wife no longer loving him. It resulted in a very real exploration of a dissolving relationship. Even the most famous action movie of all time, Die Hard, has a strong core relationship at its center - John and his wife. If you're not exploring relationships as deeply and as obsessively as you can, you’re probably not writing very good screenplays.
THEME - The way I see it - Anybody can write a film with “stuff happening.” Those films can even do well at the box office if they’re targeted to the right demo. We've all seen (and quickly forgotten) Transformers. But the screenplays that are trying to say something, that are trying to leave you with something to think about, those are the screenplays readers put down and say, “Man, I have to tell somebody about this.” One of the most effective ways of doing this is to establish a theme in your movie, a “message.” Take a step back and look at your script as a whole. What is it about? What are the things that come up over and over again? Once you figure that out, you can subtly integrate that theme into the rest of your script. The Graduate, for example, is about feeling lost and directionless when you take your first steps into the world. Saving Mr. Banks is about learning how to let go. Screenplays without a theme, without a deeper message, will likely be forgotten hours after they’re finished.
IN SUMMARY
I don’t care if you’re writing a character piece, an action-thriller, a horror film or a coming-of-age movie, your script has to have soul. And it ain’t going to have it with a bunch of set-pieces and snappy dialogue. Those things help, but they mean nothing unless we’re attached to the characters, care about what happens in their relationships, and feel like there’s something deeper being said here. Plot is great. A great plot can take a script a long way. But if you want your script to hit the reader on an emotional level, if you want them to remember your script past tomorrow, you’ll need to inject soul. Hopefully these tips help you do it. Good luck!
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Screenplay Review - Alfred Hitchcock And The Making Of Psycho
type='html'>Taking a break from Amateur Week because it's HALLLOOOOWEEEEEEN and that means Scriptshadow must be spoooooooooky for 24 hours and that means a horror script review but since I don't have any good horror scripts, I'm reviewing a script that is ABOUT a horror film. Sound fun? I hope so cause I ain't giving you another choice here.
Genre: Biopic'ish
Premise: The struggles behind the making of Psycho, the project that would become director Alfred Hitchcock's most famous film.
About: Anthony Hopkins will star as Alfred Hitchcock. Helen Mirren will star as his wife, Alma. Scarlett Johansen will star as Janet Leigh. Sacha Gervachi will direct. I believe this is Sacha's first feature film as a director (he's made a documentary). He's best known as the writer of Steven Spielberg's wackadoozy film, "The Terminal." John J. McLaughlin adapted the book into a screenplay. You probably recognize him as the writer of Black Swan.
Writer: John J. McLaughlin (based on the book "Alfred Hitchcock and The Making Of Psycho" by Stephen Rebello.
Details: 104 pages, fourth revision, Oct. 19, 2011 draft
First of all, WTF!!!???
Disney bought Lucasfilm yesterday. Disney just BOUGHT Lucas. Lucas doesn't get bought. He buys other people! And now we're getting another Star Wars trilogy. And you know what I say to that? WOOOO-HOOOO! I love it. I've been dying to get Star Wars into real writers' hands forever now, and it's finally going to happen!
How does this tie into today? Well, George Lucas was a bit of a pudgy filmmaker. And so was Alfred Hitchock! Actually, to be serious, I was not looking forward to this script. I don't like when entities try and mine a famous event when there isn't a story there. Like, oooh, it's Psycho! Let's make a movie about the making of it! Err, but the making of the movie wasn't any different from the making of any other movie. So what, let's do it anyway!
I hoped I was wrong. That there was some fascinating story behind the making of Psycho that I'd never heard about. But something told me this wasn't the making of Citizen Kane.
So here's the story. Hitchcock is coming off of North By Northwest, which is a monster hit. But he's bored. Everyone wants him to make another North By Northwest but Hitchcock, like his movies, wants to do the unexpected. Something unlike anything he's done before. And when he reads Pyscho, he knows that's it. That's his next movie.
But this is a strange move. Hitchcock doesn't do horror. Only schlocky talentless directors do horror in 1960. On top of that, it's not something the studios are interested in. They think this flick is dead before the end of opening weekend. But Hitchcock has plans to do something a little different with it. He particularly sets his sights on a shower scene, which he believes he can immortalize. You see, there wasn't much nudity in films those days, and definitely not from movie stars. Yet Hitchock had a plan to imply a ton of nudity without actually showing any. It was going to be unprecedented.
If only the studios agreed. They tell Hitchcock there's a reason everyone in town passed on Psycho and they're not funding it. I have to admit, I was a little unclear about this. Hitchcock makes mega-hit North By Northwest and the studio won't fund his next movie, which he's doing for 800,000 bucks? But whatever. The movie business was different back then so I'm probably missing something. Anyway, Hitchcock pulls a Passion Of The Christ and funds the movie himself.
In the meantime, Hitchcock starts fighting all sorts of battles. He's the master of suspense, but he's 60 years old, and the establishment wants to know when he's going to retire. Hitch doesn't like getting old, and he feels that this movie is going to make him young again. Then there's his weight problem. The dude cannot stop eating. And he hates himself for it. He sees a monster whenever he looks in the mirror, and that kills him. But the biggest battle of all is his wife, who becomes the almost-star of the movie.
Alma was Hitch's right-hand woman throughout his career and, if you believe this script, someone he wouldn't have been nearly as successful without. But Alma's getting sick of Hitch's lack of attention so starts paying attention to a dashing but not very talented writer named Whitfield Cook. They start writing a script together while Hitchcock films Psycho and it starts to weigh on Hitch, who realizes that if he doesn't rekindle his relationship with Alma, she might run off with the hack and Psycho will turn out a disaster.
So what do I think about "Alfred Hitchcock and The Making Of Psycho?" Well, it's a good enough script. It includes some interesting tidbits about the making of. But after I read it, I found myself asking, "Why did this movie need to be made?" "What new does it bring to the table?" I suppose the story of Alma is entertaining, but the script chooses to focus on Hitchcock as the main character even though her story is probably more interesting (mainly because it's less known).
At times, the writer seems just as unsure as we are about the point of the story. I mean, we start with two tightly focused scenes regarding Hitchcock's age. So naturally, Hitchcock's inner conflict will be his inability to accept getting older. However, after those scenes, the age thing is never brought up again.
Instead, we seem to focus on Hitchcock's food obsession (in particular his foie gras craving), which is unfortunately quite thin. When things don't go right, he eats. There's really nothing deeper to it than that.
Finally, we move to Hitchcock's issues with his wife. He rarely pays attention to her, despite all she's done for him. This is what leads her on this quasi emotional affair (one which she never physically acts on) and while I guess it's kind of interesting, it's also kinda not. Nothing really scandalous happens. It's just a bunch of stares and devilish thoughts, leaving the storyline without a satisfying climax. And that summarizes my feelings about the script. It just kind of stands there with little to say.
What saves it are the few behind-the-scenes looks at Psycho's famous scenes and stars. A heavy emphasis is put on the shower scene, which had never been done before in Hollywood. The most interesting thing about that storyline was the Censors Board. I guess before you even shot your movie back then, you had to go to a "Censors Board" and get approval from this dreadful stickler who decided whether everything was okay to shoot or not. For example, toilets weren't shot back then. So you couldn't shoot a toilet! Wtf???
And with the shower scene, every freaking angle had to be approved of. And it wasn't. They wanted Hitch to shoot Janet Leigh from the neck up. How boring would that have been? So Hitchcock ignores the censors and shoots the scene the way he wants it, because he knew that scene was going to be the one everyone talked about.
I have to admit, there is something cool about being behind the scenes of one of the most famous films of all time, and it is enough for me to give this script a pass. But I'm left with the very same question I had at the beginning of this review. Is there a compelling enough story here to build a movie around? I'd probably say no.
What I learned: This is mentioned in the script as one of Hitchcocks' staples and a scene that always works - A character needs to get someplace but is held up by someone who wants to chat (Marion Crane just wants to buy that car but the salesman keeps talking to her). Write this scene into your script. It always works!
Genre: Biopic'ish
Premise: The struggles behind the making of Psycho, the project that would become director Alfred Hitchcock's most famous film.
About: Anthony Hopkins will star as Alfred Hitchcock. Helen Mirren will star as his wife, Alma. Scarlett Johansen will star as Janet Leigh. Sacha Gervachi will direct. I believe this is Sacha's first feature film as a director (he's made a documentary). He's best known as the writer of Steven Spielberg's wackadoozy film, "The Terminal." John J. McLaughlin adapted the book into a screenplay. You probably recognize him as the writer of Black Swan.
Writer: John J. McLaughlin (based on the book "Alfred Hitchcock and The Making Of Psycho" by Stephen Rebello.
Details: 104 pages, fourth revision, Oct. 19, 2011 draft
First of all, WTF!!!???
Disney bought Lucasfilm yesterday. Disney just BOUGHT Lucas. Lucas doesn't get bought. He buys other people! And now we're getting another Star Wars trilogy. And you know what I say to that? WOOOO-HOOOO! I love it. I've been dying to get Star Wars into real writers' hands forever now, and it's finally going to happen!
How does this tie into today? Well, George Lucas was a bit of a pudgy filmmaker. And so was Alfred Hitchock! Actually, to be serious, I was not looking forward to this script. I don't like when entities try and mine a famous event when there isn't a story there. Like, oooh, it's Psycho! Let's make a movie about the making of it! Err, but the making of the movie wasn't any different from the making of any other movie. So what, let's do it anyway!
I hoped I was wrong. That there was some fascinating story behind the making of Psycho that I'd never heard about. But something told me this wasn't the making of Citizen Kane.
So here's the story. Hitchcock is coming off of North By Northwest, which is a monster hit. But he's bored. Everyone wants him to make another North By Northwest but Hitchcock, like his movies, wants to do the unexpected. Something unlike anything he's done before. And when he reads Pyscho, he knows that's it. That's his next movie.
But this is a strange move. Hitchcock doesn't do horror. Only schlocky talentless directors do horror in 1960. On top of that, it's not something the studios are interested in. They think this flick is dead before the end of opening weekend. But Hitchcock has plans to do something a little different with it. He particularly sets his sights on a shower scene, which he believes he can immortalize. You see, there wasn't much nudity in films those days, and definitely not from movie stars. Yet Hitchock had a plan to imply a ton of nudity without actually showing any. It was going to be unprecedented.
If only the studios agreed. They tell Hitchcock there's a reason everyone in town passed on Psycho and they're not funding it. I have to admit, I was a little unclear about this. Hitchcock makes mega-hit North By Northwest and the studio won't fund his next movie, which he's doing for 800,000 bucks? But whatever. The movie business was different back then so I'm probably missing something. Anyway, Hitchcock pulls a Passion Of The Christ and funds the movie himself.
In the meantime, Hitchcock starts fighting all sorts of battles. He's the master of suspense, but he's 60 years old, and the establishment wants to know when he's going to retire. Hitch doesn't like getting old, and he feels that this movie is going to make him young again. Then there's his weight problem. The dude cannot stop eating. And he hates himself for it. He sees a monster whenever he looks in the mirror, and that kills him. But the biggest battle of all is his wife, who becomes the almost-star of the movie.
Alma was Hitch's right-hand woman throughout his career and, if you believe this script, someone he wouldn't have been nearly as successful without. But Alma's getting sick of Hitch's lack of attention so starts paying attention to a dashing but not very talented writer named Whitfield Cook. They start writing a script together while Hitchcock films Psycho and it starts to weigh on Hitch, who realizes that if he doesn't rekindle his relationship with Alma, she might run off with the hack and Psycho will turn out a disaster.
So what do I think about "Alfred Hitchcock and The Making Of Psycho?" Well, it's a good enough script. It includes some interesting tidbits about the making of. But after I read it, I found myself asking, "Why did this movie need to be made?" "What new does it bring to the table?" I suppose the story of Alma is entertaining, but the script chooses to focus on Hitchcock as the main character even though her story is probably more interesting (mainly because it's less known).
At times, the writer seems just as unsure as we are about the point of the story. I mean, we start with two tightly focused scenes regarding Hitchcock's age. So naturally, Hitchcock's inner conflict will be his inability to accept getting older. However, after those scenes, the age thing is never brought up again.
Instead, we seem to focus on Hitchcock's food obsession (in particular his foie gras craving), which is unfortunately quite thin. When things don't go right, he eats. There's really nothing deeper to it than that.
Finally, we move to Hitchcock's issues with his wife. He rarely pays attention to her, despite all she's done for him. This is what leads her on this quasi emotional affair (one which she never physically acts on) and while I guess it's kind of interesting, it's also kinda not. Nothing really scandalous happens. It's just a bunch of stares and devilish thoughts, leaving the storyline without a satisfying climax. And that summarizes my feelings about the script. It just kind of stands there with little to say.
What saves it are the few behind-the-scenes looks at Psycho's famous scenes and stars. A heavy emphasis is put on the shower scene, which had never been done before in Hollywood. The most interesting thing about that storyline was the Censors Board. I guess before you even shot your movie back then, you had to go to a "Censors Board" and get approval from this dreadful stickler who decided whether everything was okay to shoot or not. For example, toilets weren't shot back then. So you couldn't shoot a toilet! Wtf???
And with the shower scene, every freaking angle had to be approved of. And it wasn't. They wanted Hitch to shoot Janet Leigh from the neck up. How boring would that have been? So Hitchcock ignores the censors and shoots the scene the way he wants it, because he knew that scene was going to be the one everyone talked about.
I have to admit, there is something cool about being behind the scenes of one of the most famous films of all time, and it is enough for me to give this script a pass. But I'm left with the very same question I had at the beginning of this review. Is there a compelling enough story here to build a movie around? I'd probably say no.
[ ] what the hell did I just read?
[ ] wasn't for me
[x] barely worth the read
[ ] impressive
[ ] genius
What I learned: This is mentioned in the script as one of Hitchcocks' staples and a scene that always works - A character needs to get someplace but is held up by someone who wants to chat (Marion Crane just wants to buy that car but the salesman keeps talking to her). Write this scene into your script. It always works!
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